From 61baf210a9d0d4fffcd82751ba3419dd2feb349d Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: Case Duckworth
Date: Wed, 1 Apr 2015 16:29:46 -0700
Subject: Revise a few poems in Elegies

Also add a .gitignore.  How is this so late?
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 and.txt | 42 +++++++++++++++++++++++++-----------------
 1 file changed, 25 insertions(+), 17 deletions(-)

(limited to 'and.txt')

diff --git a/and.txt b/and.txt
index b0df11c..549e46f 100644
--- a/and.txt
+++ b/and.txt
@@ -22,27 +22,35 @@ project:
       link: howtoread
 ...
 
-| And you were there in the start of it all
+| And you were there at the start of it all
+| and you were there at the end bitter as a [nail][]
+
 | and you folded your [hands like little doves][]
-| that would fly away like an afterthought
-| and you turned to me the window light on your face
-| and you asked me something that I did not recognize
-| like a great throng of people who are not you
-| and I asked are we in a [church][]
+| that flew away like an afterthought
+
+| when you turned to me and the window light
+| on your face when you told me and I did not
+
+| recognize you in the throng of those who
+| are not you and I asked [are we in a church][church]
+
 | and you answered with the look on your face
-| of someone [grieving something gone][] for years
-| but that they had been reminded of
-| by a catch in the light or in someone's voice
-| and I think maybe it could have been mine
-| and I looked away thickly my head was in jelly
-| and I didn't get an answer from you but I got one
-
-| I looked at the man in front of us with glasses
-| he was speaking and holding a book
-| and I didn't understand him he was far away
+| like birds [caught in a snare][] like on a voice
+
+| and I think it might have been my voice
+| and I could not do but look away my head
+
+| was not my head anymore or hold my thoughts
+| I never did get an answer from you but from
+
+| the [man on the radio][] murmuring all night
+| and I couldn't understand him so far away
+
 | and I could tell I was missing something important
 | and you nodded to yourself at something he said
 
 [church]: boar.html
-[grieving something gone]: roughgloves.html
 [hands like little doves]: cold-wind.html
+[nail]: last-passenger.html
+[caught in a snare]: roughgloves.html
+[man on the radio]: worse-looking-over.html
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cgit 1.4.1-21-gabe81