From 61baf210a9d0d4fffcd82751ba3419dd2feb349d Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: Case Duckworth
Date: Wed, 1 Apr 2015 16:29:46 -0700
Subject: Revise a few poems in Elegies

Also add a .gitignore.  How is this so late?
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 moongone.txt | 19 ++++++++-----------
 1 file changed, 8 insertions(+), 11 deletions(-)

(limited to 'moongone.txt')

diff --git a/moongone.txt b/moongone.txt
index 6504823..e9b0f18 100644
--- a/moongone.txt
+++ b/moongone.txt
@@ -20,17 +20,14 @@ project:
       link: mountain
 ...
 
-The moon is gone and in its place a mirror.  Looking at the night sky now
-yields nothing but the viewer's own face as viewed from a million miles,
-surrounded by the landscape he is only vaguely aware of being surrounded
-by.  He believes that he is [alone][], surrounded by desert and mountain, but
-behind him---he now sees it---someone is sneaking up on him.  He spins around
-fast, but no one is there on [Earth][].  He looks back up and they are yet
-closer in the night sky.  Again he looks over his shoulder but there is
-nothing, not even a desert mouse.  As he looks up again he realizes it's
-a cloud above him, which due to optics has looked like someone else.  The
-cloud blocks out the moon which is now a mirror, and the viewer is
-completely alone.
+The moon is gone and in its place a mirror.
+Looking at the night sky now yields nothing but the viewer's own face as viewed from a million miles, surrounded by the landscape he is only vaguely aware of being surrounded by.
+He believes that he is [alone][], surrounded by desert and mountain, but behind him---he now sees it---someone is sneaking up on him.
+He spins around fast, but no one is there on [Earth][].
+He looks back up and they are yet closer in the night sky.
+Again he looks over his shoulder but there is nothing, not even a desert mouse.
+As he looks up again he realizes it's a cloud above him, which due to optics has looked like someone else.
+The cloud blocks out the moon which is now a mirror, and the viewer is completely alone.
 
 [alone]: apollo11.html
 [Earth]: serengeti.html
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