1 files changed, 8 insertions, 11 deletions
diff --git a/moongone.txt b/moongone.txt
index 6504823..e9b0f18 100644
--- a/moongone.txt
+++ b/moongone.txt

@@ -20,17 +20,14 @@ project:
      link: mountain
 ...
-The moon is gone and in its place a mirror.  Looking at the night sky now
+The moon is gone and in its place a mirror.
-yields nothing but the viewer's own face as viewed from a million miles,
+Looking at the night sky now yields nothing but the viewer's own face as viewed from a million miles, surrounded by the landscape he is only vaguely aware of being surrounded by.
-surrounded by the landscape he is only vaguely aware of being surrounded
+He believes that he is [alone][], surrounded by desert and mountain, but behind him---he now sees it---someone is sneaking up on him.
-by.  He believes that he is [alone][], surrounded by desert and mountain, but
+He spins around fast, but no one is there on [Earth][].
-behind him---he now sees it---someone is sneaking up on him.  He spins around
+He looks back up and they are yet closer in the night sky.
-fast, but no one is there on [Earth][].  He looks back up and they are yet
+Again he looks over his shoulder but there is nothing, not even a desert mouse.
-closer in the night sky.  Again he looks over his shoulder but there is
+As he looks up again he realizes it's a cloud above him, which due to optics has looked like someone else.
-nothing, not even a desert mouse.  As he looks up again he realizes it's
+The cloud blocks out the moon which is now a mirror, and the viewer is completely alone.
-a cloud above him, which due to optics has looked like someone else.  The
-cloud blocks out the moon which is now a mirror, and the viewer is
-completely alone.
 [alone]: apollo11.html
 [Earth]: serengeti.html

diff --git a/moongone.txt b/moongone.txt index 6504823..e9b0f18 100644 --- a/moongone.txt +++ b/moongone.txt
@@ -20,17 +20,14 @@ project:
20	link: mountain	20	link: mountain
21	...	21	...
22		22
23	The moon is gone and in its place a mirror. Looking at the night sky now	23	The moon is gone and in its place a mirror.
24	yields nothing but the viewer's own face as viewed from a million miles,	24	Looking at the night sky now yields nothing but the viewer's own face as viewed from a million miles, surrounded by the landscape he is only vaguely aware of being surrounded by.
25	surrounded by the landscape he is only vaguely aware of being surrounded	25	He believes that he is [alone][], surrounded by desert and mountain, but behind him---he now sees it---someone is sneaking up on him.
26	by. He believes that he is [alone][], surrounded by desert and mountain, but	26	He spins around fast, but no one is there on [Earth][].
27	behind him---he now sees it---someone is sneaking up on him. He spins around	27	He looks back up and they are yet closer in the night sky.
28	fast, but no one is there on [Earth][]. He looks back up and they are yet	28	Again he looks over his shoulder but there is nothing, not even a desert mouse.
29	closer in the night sky. Again he looks over his shoulder but there is	29	As he looks up again he realizes it's a cloud above him, which due to optics has looked like someone else.
30	nothing, not even a desert mouse. As he looks up again he realizes it's	30	The cloud blocks out the moon which is now a mirror, and the viewer is completely alone.
31	a cloud above him, which due to optics has looked like someone else. The
32	cloud blocks out the moon which is now a mirror, and the viewer is
33	completely alone.
34		31
35	[alone]: apollo11.html	32	[alone]: apollo11.html
36	[Earth]: serengeti.html	33	[Earth]: serengeti.html