3 files changed, 11 insertions, 9 deletions
diff --git a/text/in-bed.txt b/text/in-bed.txt
index b7be002..dc3e270 100644
--- a/text/in-bed.txt
+++ b/text/in-bed.txt

@@ -40,7 +40,7 @@ project:
 ## III
-| I woke screaming and you
+| I [woke screaming][] and you
 | came to sit next to me.  I felt
 | my eyes were open too wide
@@ -75,7 +75,7 @@ project:
 | [there is an eagle][] flying
 | toward me.  She lands on
-| my knee and lays an egg.
+| [my knee and lays an egg][].
 | I think *not this again*
 | something I've never
@@ -98,8 +98,8 @@ project:
 ## VII
-| [You run through me
+| You run through me
-| like rats][rats] down an alley.
+| [like rats][rats] down an alley.
 | You are in my [blood][].
 | You scared me once
@@ -142,6 +142,7 @@ project:
 [I see my reflection is headless]: deathstrumpet.html
 [and the moon grins down]: moon-drowning.html
 [rot only for us]: options.html
+[woke screaming]: worse-looking-over.html
 [closed over me like an eyelid]: theoceanoverflowswithcamels.html
 [in an ocean]: the-sea_the-beach.html
 [there is an eagle]: mountain.html
@@ -149,3 +150,4 @@ project:
 [rats]: #I
 [blood]: plant.html
 [red]: window.html
+[my knee and lays an egg]: http://www.sacred-texts.com/neu/kveng/kvrune01.htm
diff --git a/text/riptide_memory.txt b/text/riptide_memory.txt
index 177a586..9f5ebe0 100644
--- a/text/riptide_memory.txt
+++ b/text/riptide_memory.txt

@@ -33,7 +33,7 @@ project:
 | In a dream, [my father is caught by a riptide][] off-shore.
 | He's pulled far out, far enough that the shoreline's
-| a line in his [memory][] on the horizon.  I can see him
+| a dim line in his [memory][] on the horizon.  I can see him
 | swimming, hand over hand, pulling his small weight
 | back to land.  I see him as [another shipwreck][] victim,
@@ -48,7 +48,7 @@ project:
 | pulls me back home, my memory's lonesome twinkle
 | like [stars above the mountains][].  I'll send for it
-| and try to make them, but in the thin air they'll
+| and try to make them, but at this altitude they'll
 | crumble into dust like desert air, like a memory.
 [an angel of death]: angeltoabraham.html
diff --git a/text/the-night-we-met.txt b/text/the-night-we-met.txt
index aa6d89c..16987bb 100644
--- a/text/the-night-we-met.txt
+++ b/text/the-night-we-met.txt

@@ -17,13 +17,13 @@ project:
 | in the dark, remember?  You told me time was
 | pregnant with all things.  I should've said
-| something, to draw you out from your place
+| something, to draw you out from your safety
 | in the dark.  Remember, you told me time was
 | only an illusion, [and memory was][] only
-| something to draw.  You, out from your place,
+| something to draw.  You, out from your safety,
 | I out from mine, that night, I believed in you.
-| Only illusion and memory were one, lying
+| And illusion and memory were one, lying
 | [down on your couch][], through the night you drew
 | me out from mine.  That night, I believed in you

diff --git a/text/in-bed.txt b/text/in-bed.txt index b7be002..dc3e270 100644 --- a/text/in-bed.txt +++ b/text/in-bed.txt
@@ -40,7 +40,7 @@ project:
40		40
41	## III	41	## III
42		42
43	\| I woke screaming and you	43	\| I [woke screaming][] and you
44	\| came to sit next to me. I felt	44	\| came to sit next to me. I felt
45	\| my eyes were open too wide	45	\| my eyes were open too wide
46		46
@@ -75,7 +75,7 @@ project:
75		75
76	\| [there is an eagle][] flying	76	\| [there is an eagle][] flying
77	\| toward me. She lands on	77	\| toward me. She lands on
78	\| my knee and lays an egg.	78	\| [my knee and lays an egg][].
79		79
80	\| I think not this again	80	\| I think not this again
81	\| something I've never	81	\| something I've never
@@ -98,8 +98,8 @@ project:
98		98
99	## VII	99	## VII
100		100
101	\| [You run through me	101	\| You run through me
102	\| like rats][rats] down an alley.	102	\| [like rats][rats] down an alley.
103	\| You are in my [blood][].	103	\| You are in my [blood][].
104		104
105	\| You scared me once	105	\| You scared me once
@@ -142,6 +142,7 @@ project:
142	[I see my reflection is headless]: deathstrumpet.html	142	[I see my reflection is headless]: deathstrumpet.html
143	[and the moon grins down]: moon-drowning.html	143	[and the moon grins down]: moon-drowning.html
144	[rot only for us]: options.html	144	[rot only for us]: options.html
		145	[woke screaming]: worse-looking-over.html
145	[closed over me like an eyelid]: theoceanoverflowswithcamels.html	146	[closed over me like an eyelid]: theoceanoverflowswithcamels.html
146	[in an ocean]: the-sea_the-beach.html	147	[in an ocean]: the-sea_the-beach.html
147	[there is an eagle]: mountain.html	148	[there is an eagle]: mountain.html
@@ -149,3 +150,4 @@ project:
149	[rats]: #I	150	[rats]: #I
150	[blood]: plant.html	151	[blood]: plant.html
151	[red]: window.html	152	[red]: window.html
		153	[my knee and lays an egg]: http://www.sacred-texts.com/neu/kveng/kvrune01.htm


diff --git a/text/riptide_memory.txt b/text/riptide_memory.txt index 177a586..9f5ebe0 100644 --- a/text/riptide_memory.txt +++ b/text/riptide_memory.txt
@@ -33,7 +33,7 @@ project:
33		33
34	\| In a dream, [my father is caught by a riptide][] off-shore.	34	\| In a dream, [my father is caught by a riptide][] off-shore.
35	\| He's pulled far out, far enough that the shoreline's	35	\| He's pulled far out, far enough that the shoreline's
36	\| a line in his [memory][] on the horizon. I can see him	36	\| a dim line in his [memory][] on the horizon. I can see him
37	\| swimming, hand over hand, pulling his small weight	37	\| swimming, hand over hand, pulling his small weight
38		38
39	\| back to land. I see him as [another shipwreck][] victim,	39	\| back to land. I see him as [another shipwreck][] victim,
@@ -48,7 +48,7 @@ project:
48		48
49	\| pulls me back home, my memory's lonesome twinkle	49	\| pulls me back home, my memory's lonesome twinkle
50	\| like [stars above the mountains][]. I'll send for it	50	\| like [stars above the mountains][]. I'll send for it
51	\| and try to make them, but in the thin air they'll	51	\| and try to make them, but at this altitude they'll
52	\| crumble into dust like desert air, like a memory.	52	\| crumble into dust like desert air, like a memory.
53		53
54	[an angel of death]: angeltoabraham.html	54	[an angel of death]: angeltoabraham.html


diff --git a/text/the-night-we-met.txt b/text/the-night-we-met.txt index aa6d89c..16987bb 100644 --- a/text/the-night-we-met.txt +++ b/text/the-night-we-met.txt
@@ -17,13 +17,13 @@ project:
17	\| in the dark, remember? You told me time was	17	\| in the dark, remember? You told me time was
18		18
19	\| pregnant with all things. I should've said	19	\| pregnant with all things. I should've said
20	\| something, to draw you out from your place	20	\| something, to draw you out from your safety
21	\| in the dark. Remember, you told me time was	21	\| in the dark. Remember, you told me time was
22	\| only an illusion, [and memory was][] only	22	\| only an illusion, [and memory was][] only
23		23
24	\| something to draw. You, out from your place,	24	\| something to draw. You, out from your safety,
25	\| I out from mine, that night, I believed in you.	25	\| I out from mine, that night, I believed in you.
26	\| Only illusion and memory were one, lying	26	\| And illusion and memory were one, lying
27	\| [down on your couch][], through the night you drew	27	\| [down on your couch][], through the night you drew
28		28
29	\| me out from mine. That night, I believed in you	29	\| me out from mine. That night, I believed in you