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 I. Eli {#i.-eli .unnumbered}
 ------
-"Can one truly describe an emotion?" Eli asked me over the
+"Can one truly describe an emotion?" Eli asked me over the walkie-talkie.
-walkie-talkie. He was in the bathroom, & had taken the walkie-talkie in
+He was in the bathroom, & had taken the walkie-talkie in with him absent-mindedly.
-with him absent-mindedly. I could hear sounds of his piss hitting the
+I could hear sounds of his piss hitting the toilet water.
-toilet water.
+"I can hear you peeing," I said.
-"I can hear you peeing," I said. He didn't answer so I said in apology,
+He didn't answer so I said in apology, "It's okay. Humans are sexually dimorphic."
-"It's okay. Humans are sexually dimorphic." I was sitting on my blue
+I was sitting on my blue baby blanket texting Jon, who was funny and amicable over the phone.
-baby blanket texting Jon, who was funny and amicable over the phone. He
+He made a three-message joke about greedy lawyers and I would have been laughing if not for my embarrassment toward Eli.
-made a three-message joke about greedy lawyers and I would have been
+He finally came out of the bathroom and kept his eyes straight ahead, toward the wall calendar and not at me, as he passed through the family room into his bedroom, were he shut the door quietly.
-laughing if not for my embarrassment toward Eli. He finally came out of
+Presently I heard some muffled noise as he turned on his iPod.
-the bathroom and kept his eyes straight ahead, toward the wall calendar
+I guessed he didn't feel like talking so I stayed on my blanket watching the Price is Right and texting Jon.
-and not at me, as he passed through the family room into his bedroom,
-were he shut the door quietly. Presently I heard some muffled noise as
+Drew Carrey was doing his wrap-up speech on TV when Eli finally came out of his room, red puffy streaks covering his face.
-he turned on his iPod. I guessed he didn't feel like talking so I stayed
+His eyes and nose were red too, which was almost festive against the pale green and white of the wallpaper.
-on my blanket watching the Price is Right and texting Jon.
+I had been laughing at the goofy costumes on the Price is Right and the jokes Jon was texting me, but when Eli came out of the room I stopped and just looked at him as well as I could.
+He was staring at my right shoulder as he said, "Go home now."
-Drew Carrey was doing his wrap-up speech on TV when Eli finally came out
-of his room, red puffy streaks covering his face. His eyes and nose were
-red too, which was almost festive against the pale green and white of
-the wallpaper. I had been laughing at the goofy costumes on the Price is
-Right and the jokes Jon was texting me, but when Eli came out of the
-room I stopped and just looked at him as well as I could. He was staring
-at my right shoulder as he said, "Go home now."
 "What?"
-"I said go home now. I don't want you here anymore, because I just
+"I said go home now.
-remembered I have someone coming over and I have to clean."
+I don't want you here anymore, because I just remembered I have someone coming over and I have to clean."
 "Look, Eli, I'm sorry---"
-"It doesn't have anything to do with you, I swear. Just go, okay? Go
+"It doesn't have anything to do with you, I swear.
-home now."
+Just go, okay? Go home now."
-I got up and tried to give him a hug but he withdrew from me sharply. So
+I got up and tried to give him a hug but he withdrew from me sharply.
-I walked around the coffee table as he sat down, not looking at me
+So I walked around the coffee table as he sat down, not looking at me anymore, and stared at the blank TV.
-anymore, and stared at the blank TV. The blanket I had been sitting in
+The blanket I had been sitting in was crumpled next to him like a dead bird.
-was crumpled next to him like a dead bird. I opened my mouth but thought
+I opened my mouth but thought better of talking, and closed the door behind me slowly.
-better of talking, and closed the door behind me slowly.
 II. Dimorphic {#ii.-dimorphic .unnumbered}
 -------------
-Oranges. Poison. A compromise
+Oranges. Poison. A compromise \
-between Mary & Judas. Blue
+between Mary & Judas. Blue \
 baby blankets swaddling greedy lawyers.
-Can one truly describe an emotion?
+Can one truly describe an emotion? \
-I cut my ankle with a razor blade.
+I cut my ankle with a razor blade. \
-I can only go one at a time. Humanity
+I can only go one at a time. Humanity \
-has a seething mass of eels
+has a seething mass of eels \
-for a brain, mating in the water so forcefully
+for a brain, mating in the water so forcefully \
 that it could drown you under the moon.
 III. Declaration of Poetry {#iii.-declaration-of-poetry .unnumbered}
 --------------------------
-You have to go one line at a time, and you have to start on the first or
+You have to go one line at a time, and you have to start on the first or second line.
-second line.

diff --git a/src/statements-frag.txt b/src/statements-frag.txt index a3c40a1..9d734a1 100644 --- a/src/statements-frag.txt +++ b/src/statements-frag.txt
@@ -11,62 +11,53 @@ project:
11	I. Eli {#i.-eli .unnumbered}	11	I. Eli {#i.-eli .unnumbered}
12	------	12	------
13		13
14	"Can one truly describe an emotion?" Eli asked me over the	14	"Can one truly describe an emotion?" Eli asked me over the walkie-talkie.
15	walkie-talkie. He was in the bathroom, & had taken the walkie-talkie in	15	He was in the bathroom, & had taken the walkie-talkie in with him absent-mindedly.
16	with him absent-mindedly. I could hear sounds of his piss hitting the	16	I could hear sounds of his piss hitting the toilet water.
17	toilet water.	17
18		18	"I can hear you peeing," I said.
19	"I can hear you peeing," I said. He didn't answer so I said in apology,	19	He didn't answer so I said in apology, "It's okay. Humans are sexually dimorphic."
20	"It's okay. Humans are sexually dimorphic." I was sitting on my blue	20	I was sitting on my blue baby blanket texting Jon, who was funny and amicable over the phone.
21	baby blanket texting Jon, who was funny and amicable over the phone. He	21	He made a three-message joke about greedy lawyers and I would have been laughing if not for my embarrassment toward Eli.
22	made a three-message joke about greedy lawyers and I would have been	22	He finally came out of the bathroom and kept his eyes straight ahead, toward the wall calendar and not at me, as he passed through the family room into his bedroom, were he shut the door quietly.
23	laughing if not for my embarrassment toward Eli. He finally came out of	23	Presently I heard some muffled noise as he turned on his iPod.
24	the bathroom and kept his eyes straight ahead, toward the wall calendar	24	I guessed he didn't feel like talking so I stayed on my blanket watching the Price is Right and texting Jon.
25	and not at me, as he passed through the family room into his bedroom,	25
26	were he shut the door quietly. Presently I heard some muffled noise as	26	Drew Carrey was doing his wrap-up speech on TV when Eli finally came out of his room, red puffy streaks covering his face.
27	he turned on his iPod. I guessed he didn't feel like talking so I stayed	27	His eyes and nose were red too, which was almost festive against the pale green and white of the wallpaper.
28	on my blanket watching the Price is Right and texting Jon.	28	I had been laughing at the goofy costumes on the Price is Right and the jokes Jon was texting me, but when Eli came out of the room I stopped and just looked at him as well as I could.
29		29	He was staring at my right shoulder as he said, "Go home now."
30	Drew Carrey was doing his wrap-up speech on TV when Eli finally came out
31	of his room, red puffy streaks covering his face. His eyes and nose were
32	red too, which was almost festive against the pale green and white of
33	the wallpaper. I had been laughing at the goofy costumes on the Price is
34	Right and the jokes Jon was texting me, but when Eli came out of the
35	room I stopped and just looked at him as well as I could. He was staring
36	at my right shoulder as he said, "Go home now."
37		30
38	"What?"	31	"What?"
39		32
40	"I said go home now. I don't want you here anymore, because I just	33	"I said go home now.
41	remembered I have someone coming over and I have to clean."	34	I don't want you here anymore, because I just remembered I have someone coming over and I have to clean."
42		35
43	"Look, Eli, I'm sorry---"	36	"Look, Eli, I'm sorry---"
44		37
45	"It doesn't have anything to do with you, I swear. Just go, okay? Go	38	"It doesn't have anything to do with you, I swear.
46	home now."	39	Just go, okay? Go home now."
47		40
48	I got up and tried to give him a hug but he withdrew from me sharply. So	41	I got up and tried to give him a hug but he withdrew from me sharply.
49	I walked around the coffee table as he sat down, not looking at me	42	So I walked around the coffee table as he sat down, not looking at me anymore, and stared at the blank TV.
50	anymore, and stared at the blank TV. The blanket I had been sitting in	43	The blanket I had been sitting in was crumpled next to him like a dead bird.
51	was crumpled next to him like a dead bird. I opened my mouth but thought	44	I opened my mouth but thought better of talking, and closed the door behind me slowly.
52	better of talking, and closed the door behind me slowly.
53		45
54	II. Dimorphic {#ii.-dimorphic .unnumbered}	46	II. Dimorphic {#ii.-dimorphic .unnumbered}
55	-------------	47	-------------
56		48
57	Oranges. Poison. A compromise	49	Oranges. Poison. A compromise \
58	between Mary & Judas. Blue	50	between Mary & Judas. Blue \
59	baby blankets swaddling greedy lawyers.	51	baby blankets swaddling greedy lawyers.
60		52
61	Can one truly describe an emotion?	53	Can one truly describe an emotion? \
62	I cut my ankle with a razor blade.	54	I cut my ankle with a razor blade. \
63	I can only go one at a time. Humanity	55	I can only go one at a time. Humanity \
64	has a seething mass of eels	56	has a seething mass of eels \
65	for a brain, mating in the water so forcefully	57	for a brain, mating in the water so forcefully \
66	that it could drown you under the moon.	58	that it could drown you under the moon.
67		59
68	III. Declaration of Poetry {#iii.-declaration-of-poetry .unnumbered}	60	III. Declaration of Poetry {#iii.-declaration-of-poetry .unnumbered}
69	--------------------------	61	--------------------------
70		62
71	You have to go one line at a time, and you have to start on the first or	63	You have to go one line at a time, and you have to start on the first or second line.
72	second line.